Tuesday, November 7, 2006

5...An Sp Exercise


She reminds me of this flower
five times I walked past it
     five times I turn back
          five times I change my plan of attack
     five times to make it right
five times I decided to put up a fight
It was one of a kind
worth every time I changing my mind
     Five petals that fragranced the wind
          Five senses making me desire her
over and over again
     Five silent conversations
I had with myself
          five nights of sleep I missed
could have been holding her tight
     five fingers to touch her lips
          five times to thrust against
her thirsty hips
Right before my eyes
She melted
into my fantasy
into every woman
I wanted her to be
making her that much closer to me


 

11 comments:

  1. She melted
    into my fantasy
    into every woman
    I wanted her to be
    making her that much closer to me



    damn i love those lines!

    beautiful....

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  2. Enchantng..thanks so much for always feeling where Im coming from!

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  3. I cannot quote any particular line for they all flowed together so deliciously...your articulation woo's my spirit...taking me to my own place within it...

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  4. Xpressions...I am really happy that you like my work...and that it moves you. It's one of those pieces that is not finished..but I had to stop..lol

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  5. Beautiful piece! You have become five times the great writer I knew you would be!

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  6. Brownpassion.....AWWWW, thank you sooo much!

    I'm glad you like my work..

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  7. Beautifully expressed...can't wait to read the rest.....

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  8. TY Perfectsince.....I'm glad you enjoyed this piece

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  9. I will give you a high 5. Love this.

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  10. Sending a high five back at ya, Honey! Thanks.

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